Ejecting a threeliner

Sometimes a writer got an idea from it's quite impossible to get rid of ... Here is one my struggling dated March 2013:

1.

a vomiting cloud
emerging snowflakes
all over

Vomiting; some matter ejected from the stomach through the mouth to throw up. - ?

Checked some synonyms for throw: bowl, cast, fling, heave, hurl, pitch, sling, toss


a tossed cloud?

the clouds heaving
snowflakes
...

next sketch, # 2:

fresh snowflakes
emerging all over -
a vomiting cloud

Not so nice, this whole idea; vomiting cloud?

# 3:

emerged
new whirling snowflakes
all over wintry fields

Rewrote that as

# 4:

new whirling
snowflakes emerging
all over [wintry] fields

- Because "wintry" not needed, there is already at least one snowflake = a winter kigo.
Then I tasted the word "hurl" and tried it:

# 5:

from hurling clouds
snowflakes emerging
all over

next one is the latest on this battlefield:

# 6:


clouds hurling
emerging snowflakes
all over

I think a good poems must include at least one verb. And others say haiku must include a kigo word. Here it is snow(flake) = winter.

So, this seems to be a haiku?




:-)